The subject is a little to close for my taste, as the wide angle close up is not to faltering. DOF is a little bit of a problem, eyes in focus, but the mouth is not. It throws off the shot. It works if the ears are blur a little, but having the mouth blur does not work well.
What were your camera settings? I would suggesting down a little and keep the focus where you have it for the eyes, as that did turn out well. and it should give you less blur on the month area. Also the shot is a little under expose in the eyes. As it is a bit dark and that it draws attention, but the details are lost.
But you are off to a good start,